Guidelines

[lit-gal.livejournal.com]

Title: Guidelines, Power Play (Previous Parts HERE)
Fandom: Sentinel
Prompt: Hovel
Rating: PG-13 for language
Summary: I was having trouble with my Guidelines story, and yesterday it came to me that "hovel" would nicely connect the section I posted last week to a bit I already had written. So, here are Jim and Blair staking out a hovel...

On with the Story

Comments

[smwright.livejournal.com]

Very well written story (even though I am utterly unfamiliar with canon for this series). I can completely follow the issues of power struggle and feel for the characters and their individual plights. I really enjoyed reading this!

Only one suggestion... I would probably rate this as PG-13 for the language. I went back to the summary to double check after reading the story (because I mis-remembered and thought you'd listed it as G, but with all the (admittedly appropriate and well placed) usage of the work fuck and its derivatives, I'd go P-13.

Well done!

[smwright.livejournal.com]

I forgot to add (sorry!) that I especially love this line:

Charlie looked like a beaten dog about ready to run for the hills.

I'm a sucker for a good turn of phrase in any story, and this one really struck me.

[lit-gal.livejournal.com]

I'm surprise you can follow this because this is the fourth "novel" in an AU series based on The Sentinel, so it makes a lot of references that even Sentinel people might not get if they hadn't read the first three stories. And you're totally right on the rating. I get so used to judging by sexual content that the language slid right past me.

[lit-gal.livejournal.com]

I'm glad you liked that. Charlie is my original character, so I am rather fond of him since he's mine all mine.