ext_118092 ([identity profile] jitkajaylor.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] tamingthemuse 2008-04-07 05:35 am (UTC)

Mm, interesting. That uncomfortable shift between third and first actually works well as a mood-setter. It starts disconnected and moves toward a powerful moment of time that is completely wrapped up with the "Time to go" dual meaning. I like the way it flowed, though I might have gone with a change of tense from past to present somewhere during the last scene for a change in the immediacy of 'the end'.

A different look at one of my favorite eps. I like it!

~JJ~

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