Adorable, and I definitely second the feeling of potential impending angst. =D
I don't know if some of this was intentional, but I think you might have a couple of tense-matching issues--I feel like most of this was written in past tense, but then sentences like "Since that rainy day Doumeki has made it his mission..." sort of threw me.
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Date: 2008-07-24 05:22 am (UTC)I don't know if some of this was intentional, but I think you might have a couple of tense-matching issues--I feel like most of this was written in past tense, but then sentences like "Since that rainy day Doumeki has made it his mission..." sort of threw me.
Other than that, fabulous work. I enjoyed it.