Thank you so much! Really glad I hit the emotions just right. ^_^
Oh, you know she would do it. (I'd do it. ~_^)
I see what you mean. It really does look a bit like that, doesn't it? I played with it a bit, and the over emphasizing looks good, but just not the direction I was aiming for. I took out the commas instead, and came up with this:
They wouldn't understand why she let Spike touch her there and there and especially there where it hurt so good.
Don't worry; what you said makes perfect sense. It would sound great if spoken, but reading it just doesn't work. I'll play with it a bit more, but thank you so much for spotting it for me!
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Oh, you know she would do it. (I'd do it. ~_^)
I see what you mean. It really does look a bit like that, doesn't it? I played with it a bit, and the over emphasizing looks good, but just not the direction I was aiming for. I took out the commas instead, and came up with this:
They wouldn't understand why she let Spike touch her there and there and especially there where it hurt so good.
Don't worry; what you said makes perfect sense. It would sound great if spoken, but reading it just doesn't work. I'll play with it a bit more, but thank you so much for spotting it for me!
~Nebula