First: pretty banner! Gorgeous coloring that I thought fit what I imagine this story is/will be.
Second...*turns and kicks Angel and Wes hard* I sincerely hope they felt that and that later they come to regret their actions in this chapter because....well, because. *hugs Fred* I did like that you managed to make me want to kick them without bashing their characters though. I hate when that happens. Angel was the one I was really frustrated with in this chapter though. Because when he lost his soul (which, granted, they set out to do) in season 4, the gang locked him up and watched over him and stuck by him when they managed to get his soul back. And Wes...well, I mean yeah, they pretty much said "See ya." after the Connor incident but even after it all, once they knew the reasons, they were able to fight next to him and start to rebuild the friendship. And granted, none of them remember this...except Angel. Which is why I was frustrated with him because he remembered the entire thing with Connor and Wesley and him losing his soul but when Fred of all people needs his help, he's not even willing to say, "Hey, maybe we should try to give her back her soul." or something? No benefit of the doubt at all? Grrr!
As you can see, you made me feel very strongly about that part of the chapter. ^_^ Which, yay! Good job! LOL.
One of my favorite parts about this chapter was Fred remembering back to Father's Day and the comparison between the burns because I was definitely able to identify with that part. (Only I burned myself on the oven rack when making my grandma a birthday cake when I was nine or ten...my brother's reaction from the living room? "Wow, I heard that sizzle all the way in here!" Thanks, bro, I'm feeling the love. And I probably would have wanted to kick him too except his next reaction was to abandon whatever sports game he was watching to come be sure I was okay and help me wrap it. LOL.) Anyway, my point was that you make it very easy to imagine what Fred is feeling with parts like that and like this:
She watched the sunlight warily, before glancing at the opening. Outside, she could hear cars rushing past, could hear their engines putting away at the nearby light, could hear the radios that were going in every single car out there. It frightened her, and she clamped her hands over her ears, trying to get it to stop. She could still hear too much, too everything, and she wondered how Angel coped.
Hee! I can never resist quoting, especially since I know it'll get a squee! *g*
And I just love that last section where she thinks of Spike and just knows he won't turn her away. My heart was just aching for her when she was walking to Spike's apartment and she was barefoot and the blood was just dripping and she felt like nothing mattered...gah! Just...Fred! And the ending was great, the way you parallelled it with the last chapter but this time there was someone there to catch her when she fell. It definitely ends the chapter on a more hopeful note. So, I loved it! And I'm caught up! Yay! *bounces* And if you happen to get inspiration for any of your other fics, you won't hear any objections coming from my corner. You might hear some cheering though. ^_^
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Second...*turns and kicks Angel and Wes hard* I sincerely hope they felt that and that later they come to regret their actions in this chapter because....well, because. *hugs Fred* I did like that you managed to make me want to kick them without bashing their characters though. I hate when that happens. Angel was the one I was really frustrated with in this chapter though. Because when he lost his soul (which, granted, they set out to do) in season 4, the gang locked him up and watched over him and stuck by him when they managed to get his soul back. And Wes...well, I mean yeah, they pretty much said "See ya." after the Connor incident but even after it all, once they knew the reasons, they were able to fight next to him and start to rebuild the friendship. And granted, none of them remember this...except Angel. Which is why I was frustrated with him because he remembered the entire thing with Connor and Wesley and him losing his soul but when Fred of all people needs his help, he's not even willing to say, "Hey, maybe we should try to give her back her soul." or something? No benefit of the doubt at all? Grrr!
As you can see, you made me feel very strongly about that part of the chapter. ^_^ Which, yay! Good job! LOL.
One of my favorite parts about this chapter was Fred remembering back to Father's Day and the comparison between the burns because I was definitely able to identify with that part. (Only I burned myself on the oven rack when making my grandma a birthday cake when I was nine or ten...my brother's reaction from the living room? "Wow, I heard that sizzle all the way in here!" Thanks, bro, I'm feeling the love. And I probably would have wanted to kick him too except his next reaction was to abandon whatever sports game he was watching to come be sure I was okay and help me wrap it. LOL.) Anyway, my point was that you make it very easy to imagine what Fred is feeling with parts like that and like this:
She watched the sunlight warily, before glancing at the opening. Outside, she could hear cars rushing past, could hear their engines putting away at the nearby light, could hear the radios that were going in every single car out there. It frightened her, and she clamped her hands over her ears, trying to get it to stop. She could still hear too much, too everything, and she wondered how Angel coped.
Hee! I can never resist quoting, especially since I know it'll get a squee! *g*
And I just love that last section where she thinks of Spike and just knows he won't turn her away. My heart was just aching for her when she was walking to Spike's apartment and she was barefoot and the blood was just dripping and she felt like nothing mattered...gah! Just...Fred! And the ending was great, the way you parallelled it with the last chapter but this time there was someone there to catch her when she fell. It definitely ends the chapter on a more hopeful note. So, I loved it! And I'm caught up! Yay! *bounces* And if you happen to get inspiration for any of your other fics, you won't hear any objections coming from my corner. You might hear some cheering though. ^_^