I can really visualize this, and revenge stories really are my thing so I truly enjoyed this. I'll be interesting in seeing more when you have the whole thing done.
I did see one awkward spot. He arranged a meeting with them to make the arrangements. Using the word twice just kinda jarred me.
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Date: 2006-11-13 02:00 am (UTC)I did see one awkward spot.
He arranged a meeting with them to make the arrangements.
Using the word twice just kinda jarred me.