Invocatus Rex, Part I: Xavier, Chapter V
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Title: Invocatus Rex, Xavier, Chapter V
Fandom: Original Fiction, The Witch War Histories, Vol. III
Prompt: #36 Abacus
For: by Taming the Muse
Warnings: None I can think of.
Rating: PG-ish
Summary: The druid Roger gives his account in his final hours.
Word Count: a s**tload
A/N: Memories almost wholly reorganized, and all stories tagged! Ongoing story, in chronological order, here.
A/N2: No beta this week; so, please point out any errors (and be kind to the overwhelmed prof in the homestretch of a grueling semester *g*).
This chapter has been moved, along with all prior chapters, to my LJ, where they're located in chronological order in the IR section of my memories.
Fandom: Original Fiction, The Witch War Histories, Vol. III
Prompt: #36 Abacus
For: by Taming the Muse
Warnings: None I can think of.
Rating: PG-ish
Summary: The druid Roger gives his account in his final hours.
Word Count: a s**tload
A/N: Memories almost wholly reorganized, and all stories tagged! Ongoing story, in chronological order, here.
A/N2: No beta this week; so, please point out any errors (and be kind to the overwhelmed prof in the homestretch of a grueling semester *g*).
This chapter has been moved, along with all prior chapters, to my LJ, where they're located in chronological order in the IR section of my memories.
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Date: 2007-04-14 09:52 am (UTC)I really like the image at the start of each of them having their separate duties to perform. No one is above anyone else - they each have something to contribute to the moment. I suppose it harks back to the domesticity I've mentioned before. I also love Xavier recognising the thread that binds them all. It's like they're all players in the history and the mysteries of the sword and bound to the characters in it's past.
And Roger didn't call to Etienne, and the weird stuff in the previous chapter still happened. Hmm, I still don't believe in coincidences.
Lovely retelling of the story of Medraut and Sylive and the sword. The description of the two of them setting eyes on each other for the first time reminded me bizarrely enough of a moment from The Godfather where Michael sees Apollonia and knows he's going to marry her. Her father says he's been hit by the "thunderbolt". So when you then described Medraut as Thunderstruck, you really hit that moment just right for me.
The bit about the twins and one nearly killing the other with the sword scared the shit out of me
And finally, I'm curious if the Sylvie's name for the sword - Borre, resonated with the old druid. Enquiring minds want to know.
As always love, you paint a really compelling picture of these all too human people against a backdrop of magic and mystery which just keeps drawing me back for more
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Date: 2007-04-15 09:05 am (UTC)I love this description He spread his arms wide with these words, and I laughed. His manner was so unassuming and yet so naturally arrogant that his parentage was patently obvious. *Laughs* But I'm taking this personally - I wondered how no one in Britain had figured it out.
And I liked the contrast between age and youth - Foolish, when I think back on it, that I imagined Medraut would have a mind for anything of the past that night.
And this could have come from my brother's mouth - I knew with the sinking awareness fathers of daughters have felt through the ages that this was no ordinary first meeting.
Sylvie's and Medraut's children will be powerful in magic, having it from both sides. But all three of Aisling's children have something of it, and it sounds like it is strong in all of them. I am intrigued why the sword should 'possess' young Dryw as it did. There is certainly more to hear of that.
Your stories are always good, but I've been thinking about writing so I noticed things this week. This chapter has a flow, a form and a smoothness, which really makes it a pleasure to read. That bit when Roger has just begun, where Sylvie fidgets, that is very good - to break the speech with action, to distract the reader for a moment, so the speech does not go on too long and begin to loose it's humanity and naturalness. And of course the form of the bookended central narrative is very effective, but differently used here because the central narrative is told first person.
Very nice. Thank you.
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Date: 2007-04-15 11:37 am (UTC)(and now I'm done with the literary cheating - for now) *g*
And you? Have you decided you know the answer to the riddle? It's much simpler after this past chapter, but I've another clue a couple weeks down the road if you'd like confirmation. *winks at you* Come on... you know you want to play... (though I'll admit your fortitude is amazing).
Hmm... Sunday. No prompt yet but soon. We'll see where it leads us both. I'm still looking at BoaS with a raised brow after this week.