ext_211639 ([identity profile] smwright.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] tamingthemuse 2007-05-27 11:10 am (UTC)

Your POV shifts are really good. I don't know the personalities you're writing (i.e., how you're writing them) yes, but you're drawing very clear distinctions between them.

I finally take notice that he’s decked out in the melt in your mouth Reese’s Peanut Butter Cup firesuit
This is a great metaphor!

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