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[lit-gal.livejournal.com]

Title: Losing Faith
Fandom: Original
Prompt: semper fidelis
Warnings: None
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Sometimes you have to consider the impossible

Okay, it was a hard prompt, and the rerun awards sucked up my time, so I hope this one doesn't read too rough.

BAD NEWS:  I remove original fiction after the week is up.
GOOD NEWS: I got this one published.

Comments

[jitkajaylor.livejournal.com]

Ooh, a little touch of humor that devolves into a creepy kind of reality because I can see that happening (read too many books on sociopathy). It's really subtle on getting to Maggie's final betrayal (I'm thinking there was some poisoning of some sort if he kept getting heartburn after following doctor's advice). I did figure out where it was going when Frank said he complained about it getting worse. The quick sentences of what they're doing was nice to develop their interests and conflict.

~JJ~